by Amateurwriter722
Excellent story, with interesting characters and a high level of eroticism. A few too many errors, which somewhat spoiled the flow - I’m surprised the grammar check didn’t catch most of them. You have picked up the rather strange use of ‘underwear’ which is creeping into US English - another example of trying to avoid ‘rude’ words, like using ‘restroom’ for ‘toilet’. Underwear for ladies consists of bra, panties, maybe a slip, so using underwear instead of panties or knickers is confusing. 5 ⭐️