All Comments on 'Road Trips - Breaking New Ground'

This is superb. It is appealing and arousing for many reasons. First, you do such a great job of establishing your relationship with your wife and your family as the background for the adventure you describe. Second, because the unfolding events are initiated, developed and led by the strong women in your story, whose characters are so well drawn. . Third, because you take the trouble and have the skill to describe the development of the situation slowly and in detail. And fourth, you likewise take the trouble and have the skill to describe what happens in the bedroom vividly and very arousingly. So, bravo, and more please!

Stories written in the second person never work well. You keep saying 'you do this', 'you do that'. No, I don't. You are talking to someone else, not me, your reader!

Also, you are alienating the majority of your audience. Obviously the 'you' that you keep referring to is female. Most readers are men.You've lost them.