All Comments on 'Ronnie: Ebony Girl Tries White'

Good story!

4

Very good story, I would enjoy hearing more of your stories.

Liked what you did here — expanded your journal; well crafted. Nice title. Two believable main characters, especially Veronica, in a believable scenario. Poly-Sci — is that polymer science? Just curious. Not sure if you intend more stories around Steve and Ronnie or just Ronnie focused tales, but hope so.

Good premise.

But really rushed.

(Elementary school "What I did last summer": I went to Europe. England. France. Italy.)

Reader's Digest version.

Needed many more details.

Needed lots of dialog during sex about what was happening. What each was feeling. What each would like to have happen next.

Needed lots of preliminaries. Wonderment about being with a black girl for the first time. Wonderment about being with a white boy for the first time.

Had real potential. Didn't deliver.

Three stars.

4 *, would have been 5 but for the uncut anal bareback. Yuck.

Far better than the typical first story of late. 3*

Anal? So he's really just a closeted gay man, pretending otherwise while trying some racial differences to cover it up? Gross.

Pounded pune.

I agree with the great premise review. Try again and take it slowly and let the sexual tension build. They are exploring each other and the difference in skin color for the 1st time. Tell us what they are feeling and the excitement they are experiencing. Don't give up!

I enjoyed the story. I agree with others that more build up and detail would be welcome. Looking forward to more from you.

Ronnie needs to get her pussy ate by Steven. Most white boys are very good pussy eaters

Nice ad realistic story and setting but I think it goes over Ronnie’s feelings a little bit quickly and one would like to hear a little bit more.

BWWM is the best. Pretty good story for your first. You have a good start, it just needs a little more depth.