All Comments on 'Runaway Fantasy Pt. 01'

This was lovely and gentle. Please, say there's going to be a part 2 (at least)

Nice try.

But it does feel more vaguely remembered...than felt.

And Mike seems "assembled" rather than breathing in the room.

Your other writings here are sooo much more affecting!

Thanks for your conscientious effort!

I agree with King. It lacks the feeling, excitement, anticipation and sexiness of your first story. I’m afraid the scenario is creepy. This guy is controlling in a unsexy way. Sorry. I loved your first story.