All Comments on 'Ryan's Window'

This is poorly written. Errors present themselves frequently, leaving me wondering if English is your preferred language. This could be a really hot story with an editor reviewing your work.

Disappointing

While there were some good thoughts, the story flow was poor and underdeveloped. The multiple typos and grammatical errors made it difficult to read. Use the checkers in Word or Google Docs, or even better, get an editor. Keep trying and you’ll get there.