All Comments on 'Saint Barbra's Reform School'

It was VERY hard to get past the first paragraph.

"Lidia pulled up the driveway of Heather's home, they had been best friends since public school and been there for each other threw (through) thick and thin. There had been so much in both of their own young lives so far, Heather loosing (losing) her mother to cancer when she was 16 and Lidia's own tragic loss of her parents in a car accident when she was 14. The two girls had only grown closer because of it, but Lidia had to admit that Heather had taken a turn for the worse afterwards."

As we get further into the story it just becomes worse. I'd strongly suggest an editor/proofreader before you publish anything more.

Have to agree with the other poster. You need someone to edit & proof your story. The other thing I just couldn't get past was your spelling of Lydia. That was like a set of nails on a blackboard each time you mispelt the name.

...no more!!!

"loosing her mother" - Oh, if only I'd stopped there.

Please, please don't write any more. Ever.

Sorry about the grammatical issues, I've already submitted an update to fix them which should be up any time.

I guess it was jut kind of an off day when I edited it.

As always though, you got exactly what you paid for, so all complaints duly ignored ;)

Maybe it did need a bit more editing, but it was a very enjoyable story. I would love to see a continuation. Thank you.

Thanks @zena99, the edited version has been sitting in the Literotica queue for six days now, not sure why it hasn't been posted yet.

No plans to continue the story at the moment, but you never know.