All Comments on 'Santo Diablo Pt. 03'

This story is going a bit stupid and over the top.

3/5 first real time l marked down, shame!

I sort of felt this way when reading Chapter 2, but this chapter sorta confirms my opinion. You're chasing two hares and getting neither. You could have written a story about sexy undercover operations. You could have written a story about a non-stop orgy at a commune. Heck, you could have gotten off Literotica and written a story about spies and intrigue. As it stands, you tried to go for everything and ended up with a mish-mash that flows like sewage and doesn't quite hit for any of the categories.

I am a few years late but I think many things were somewhat stupid and out of line for the characters. Especially Isabella and maybe Nicole but she's always been quite unpredictable so it's somewhat reasonable. All Isabella's talk about similarities in the family and that being enough to warrant submission from her seemed a little BS (almost like a nonsense talk about sharing the same blood) when all along in the story, she is one of the few who is very strong-minded and in control of herself. The 'exchange' (that's what it felt like) between Stephanie and Nicole looked a bit forced and out of the blue. And Rich is wayyy more trusting of his new 'family' and that too so quick. It's almost like he is setting himself up for failure which is kinda stupid since he is supposed to have grown and learnt from his mistakes in the Assassins