by dippety
Should have proof read it before submitting it! Mistake in his /her ages?
good start
Great start, looking forward to chapter 2!
You could use an editor as it is difficult to find your own grammatical errors and repetitions. Just saying....
Great story enjoyed that, looking forward to Part 2 honey
Bring on part 2. Big turn on as an older guy often fantasising about younger women
Wonderful start.
Hope you haven’t given up on finishing it?