All Comments on 'Smidge's Problem'

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SirDigbyChickenCaesarSirDigbyChickenCaesar3 months ago

"Energy and Resource Post (ERP)" — I'm not sure if this is a pun or not. :p

Good show for a first; post-apocalyptic furries are the premise that writes itself. The action is a little clinical and the characters read fairly generic, but assuming Sam's intended as a recurring OC, you'll have plenty of practice on both. Otherwise, my only -technical- critique is to spare a proofread or two: the tense keeps waffling between past and present.

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