by patrickroundhouse
I liked it but it needs to be longer. Short chapters like this end just as you start jerking off. Four stars.
I’m sorry your first chapter was a fine piece of work with a lot of thought and build up. The second chapter read like you were cramming for an exam the next day. It seemed that you just rushed right through it.
Such a beautiful story of love
MORE PLEASE. MORE, MORE.
What did KIM do ????
Did he get more from his MOM????????????
This wasn’t as good as the first chapter. Don’t just churn these out. You started off well.
Concept of the first chapter was really good and I was hoping there would be more of the “bet” happening. This just seemed to turn into the same sort of story we’ve all read before unfortunately.
Your original premise and story were so strong and so original with the bet. But I feel this second chapter spoilt the potential a bit. Would love if you did a new alternative version of the second chapter that doesn’t rush as much…
He seems ready to fuck his mom and shoot his next massive load all over Aunt Kim's face...