by Lightning454572
Interesting story. My only niggle is that so few, if any, of the characters are really likable. Most are self centered, selfish and somewhat abusive. But hey...it's a fantasy right?
YOU really need a proof reader, mom picked you up at airport not hospital, many many spelling mistakes. long story but left hanging ,
i really think you had a good story then deviated too much. cut out the others and focus on gabe, kelly, and summer. the rest makes it feel unbelievable and like some cheap porno,
Well crap, I just found this story yesterday, read all of it now and enjoyed it very much. Then I was wondering when the next chapter would likely be out and noticed that you haven't posted in 6 months.
I was wondering if Gabe was going to get any of the other girls that had been introduced, hopefully. If he'll end up fucking his mom, I'm sorta 50/50 on this, it could be hot as long as they refer to each other by name instead of mom and son. Then he describes the teacher, I want him,Summer and Kelly to do her. Honestly I want her and mom myself.
But unfortunately this will probably be another story that I never see any more of. 😕