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by dafsub

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gentleoneexplorergentleoneexploreralmost 9 years ago
Not Bad

This is good but I hope there is more to come. It feels like just a teaser. He has dominated in the area of sexual release but there are other ways to be dominated and he simply controlled your orgasm.

visioneervisioneeralmost 9 years ago

A good first story. I like that you use a lot of dialogue - it helps pull the reader into the scene. As a constructive criticism, I recommend more showing and less telling ('I feel...').

dafsubdafsubalmost 9 years agoAuthor
Thank you

Love the constructive criticism :)

Thank you

I hope to write more

:)

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
Very good story. I really got hot and even wet in reading it. Thank you. Write again please.

Thanks for writing this beaut story.

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