All Comments on 'Submission Ch. 01'

shit peice---What a sick mind it has

you so much, why did you read it? The title and first lines gave away what was going to happen. Methinks you are just trying to inflict your own point of view on everybody else. While not my personal taste, thought it was fairly well written, with reasonable grammer and spelling. Certainly better than some other tales.

Other than the obvious typos/spelling mistakes, I liked it. Seemed like a very short scene. Presuming there is a chapter 2 coming soon to continue the story?