All Comments on 'Susie 21st Spécialé'

You should stick to publishing stories in your native language. I can tell it's not English. Your nouns and pronouns are all screwed up. I can't tell what is going on, and that was just the first few paragraphs.

You should probably pull this story down and re-publish it in the language in which it was written. I am sure it will make much more sense then.