All Comments on 'Suzy Ch. 01'

... but you should have extended the story to, maybe, that first evening at home. I like the potential of this tale but please get an editor. Spelling is important: mistakes can be such a turn-off and you simply cannot rely on your WP spell checker.

I think it's up to you how you break a story into chapters, so making the cut here is fine. I am certainly looking forward to reading more based on the agreement that was set up. The "half weight" idea should get really interesting.

Interesting. Wonder where this will lead you?

I am very much intrigued. Can't wait to see where this is going. Thanks for your effort and please give us more.

max052

Wow! So much potential for future episodes!

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