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by Gman12617

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Lobosolo51Lobosolo514 months ago

ok story line. definitely needs editing - poor grammar in places - lots of misspelled words (or just the wrong word for the situation). keep working it.

AnonymousAnonymous4 months ago

Very nice

zena99zena993 months ago

Loved it. A wonderful beginning.

AardieAardie3 months ago

4 stars would have been five but for all the typoes.

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Re-editing the first three chapters of “Take My Card” and taking more time to do it better on the next chapters. Expect more soon.

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