by Daddysprettybabydoll
I love the use of the “you” instead of she or he. It’s leave this open to the reader to interpret as they see fit. To me it could be a man or a woman. I thoroughly enjoyed this unique piece. Can’t wait to read more.
Normally it's not so easy for me to get into a story, especially one that isn't in my native language, but you created a story were I could just lose myself in for a moment. Keep up the good work, can't wait for more!
A story in a first persons view is always interesting , it’s fun to read where you can actually portray yourself in the story.
Keep up the good work , I know you can do it.
Need a little of “rage” in it. *hint*
I love how easy it is to picture myself in the story, you create great imagery. I look forward to reading more from you