All Comments on 'Taming the Boss Pt. 01'

Sounds like you already know where it is heading.

Hi

I really really love the 1. chapter

I hope she will take care of his private live and will be the mistress wife he is needing

without effecting his business success.

He wants to have life long partnership.

Hope she will be the one for him

For someone whose first language isn't English , your writing is pretty good.

You asked for constructive comments/feedback, so this is intended in that vein; In general your writing is good, especially as a second language. The only suggestion is that the buildup of Johnny's need to be submissive is a bit too short. In real life, something like this would take longer as the building of trust between the two main characters developed. It's not a terrible flaw, nor does it ruin the story — in the future you might try to include more thoughts, doubts, cautious hopes and other common human thoughts/emotions. This would both build the characters and draw the reader into the whole experience. Nice start on your story !

Solid start, just noticed used word "stair" when in this context "stare" would be the correct choice

*It was awesome*

I noticed when you should have used 'she' rather than he when snatching the girls but just a minor typo error is ok. And you did great , I checked and saw you last posted back in 2020. I hope you'll come back and I also wish that you left after completing this

Well, you've made a god start. Enjoyed reading this, and i'm looking forward to see just where you take this.