All Comments on 'Tender Love in Tennessee'

would have been a better category.

I couldn't believe she was just going to leave me like this. We then laid down in front of the fire and fell asleep in front of fire with her head on my chest.

What was your first clue that you fell asleep in front of the fire

As a woman I would have enjoyed the scene you so kindly painted with your words ...However I would edit it some it seems you have the same problem I do and get caught up with what you are trying to say that you get past mixed with present. :)

A read.

am i the only one that noticed thag said a mana nd his women not woman

Needs serious proof reading. Not even a first draft. Needs to be smoothed out. Good concept just needs development.