All Comments on 'Thank You Felix Ch. 01'

I like where you are going with this story but you need to give Felix more knowledge about his power.

I'm really excited to read this story and to see where it goes from here! A great effort! Re: your note at the beginning, I may start using the tag "Mind Control Romance" as well. That would have been the perfect tag for my Brain Development Enterprises series but I didn't even think of using it!

This first chapter of Thank You Felix is well-written but it really needed to have a more extensive introduction to the characters. Also, there needed to be a more careful and slower paced build-up to the first love scene. That said, this chapter is very good overall, with a wonderful romantic atmosphere.