All Comments on 'The Bouncer Ch. 01'

This is a good teaser and has the makings of a good story ...

BUT it needs spelling, grammar and punctuation fixed. They get in the way of reading it.

It is a very good start. I hope you clean it up as Egg suggests and write the rest of it.

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-- srgeek --

H'mmmn, based on the date of the first comment it appears not only has ModernDragon left the building, but maybe s/he forgot where it is.

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-- srgeek --