by jd8406
Wonderful story. I enjoyed reading it. Very interesting plot. Looking forward to each additional chapter. 5 stars.
Dude's got skills, yo! And plenty of stamina, keeping up with five women, all of which are ok with sharing with no jealousies. A bit farfetched, i'd say. But, hey, it'f fiction- why NOT go over the top? Quite the harem. I had two girlfriends at once back in my 20s and it had good and bad points, but no interaction between the two.
One minor thing that bugs me is when a writer feels the need to tell which hand is doing what to which breast: my left hand fondled her right tit. Maybe look for other adjectives. It was a good read, but would be better with less stilted, more realistic dialogue, Thanks for writing. 5 stars