All Comments on 'The Creature and Jessica'

The eroticism was ok, but to be honest you really could have done much better. There was literally no build of characters. This was just a burst onto the erotic scene that made it feel rushed, like you just wanted to throw a story out there. How did this creature come to be? And for that matter who the hell is Jessica? We don't know her or anything about her at all. Background helps readers connect to the characters and therefore increases the feel of the erotic moments. I really think you could do much better.

I enjoyed the story quite alot, and I also enjoyed that the girl was given a choice in the fun, (im not a fan of rape even in stories) but the ending didnt make sense. You told how she came over and over until she finally passed out from the pleasure, so why would she hope that the creature never came back?