The Dancing Queen

Nice story, well done!

Well told story.

You really wrote the Cam character as a massive dumbass pussy. His first wife divorces him and he stays friends with her. She deceived and lied to him so he rolls over and let's her tickle his tummy. He allows Celia to do what she likes. The way younwrote thier interaction it is obvious to a deaf dumb amd blind person that she is cheating but he cant see it. He really is a pussy. How is he such a succes in business.

one thing though I don't get how quickly Celia fell out of love with her "true love" and husband. OK so she flirts dances and apparently sluts around - not sure though why it turned into such a level of disrespect and hatred and so fast.

Lack of a coda about Celia cost a ⭐️

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3 ***

How did the MC think a marriage with Celia would ever work? If you can't trust them, then seriously how will marriage fix that? Not talking about some isolated case where they fight, she gets drunk and crosses a "dancing" line and they argue and make up afterwards. Even then hold off on the wedding and get some counseling or at least really talk it out. But seriously putting a ring on a spouse's finger doesn't change their behavior or personality. Kim was different. She came out of the closet. It sucks but there was no malicious intent. Just a bad match for marriage but they remained good friends. Totally different.

MC was a bit of a clueless schmuck. His friends bailed him out on several occasions.

Wanted to give it 5 stars but settled on 4. Needed to see Cecelia suffer more and maybe have that conversation of regret. Ending left me a little unsatisfied but a great story otherwise.

I saw a comment by angelrider on your evil woman story. She is right about your heroes. You have a propensity to make your male characters super businessmen, ambitious, smart and talented while also developing them as complete fucking imbeciles in their relationships.

This story is a prime example of that. This dude was a simpleton. I will concede that your stories flow well but your decisions are consistently horrible.

Decent story but an explanation was needed as to why Celia acted the way she did. Was she in it with Marcus to take his money from the beginning? Enquiring minds want to know.

No happy ending , no wife and kids ? He couldn’t see she was a slut! And she took 25000 without a fight . And Marcus had a knife and he should be in crutches or worse!

The clueless mentality of your MC ruined this. Instances of too dumb for belief.

1. Watches his gf being felt up and nearly fucked by a ghetto black dude, who she clearly had more than a casual relationship.

2. Repeatedly having trouble putting obvious clues together she was cheating on him.

3.How could he expect a marriage to be sustained when he's gone all the time. This doesn't excuse her but he seems oblivious as to the deep effect on her.

4. He is a needy sip: "Oh please care about me! I'LL put up with nearly anything if you will care for me.

5. Cecilia is a slut but, emotionally, he's a total loser.

Presenting this type male MC plays into the Femdom weak, dumb, submissive male.

I simply reject this theme.

I can't have much sympathy when the main character had seen enough long before getting engaged to know what the outcome of the marriage would be. As written this story should have ended at the early dance club date, though it could have been saved by toning down the future wife's behaviour so that the future wasn't so clear.

So , our idiot protag is dating a girl .

She clearly shows him she's a dance slut and coal burner .

Our brilliant protag thinks,- DAMN , I better marry this trashy mud shark who is obviously cheating on me with these gangbangers !

One star for IR stories

Disappointed that Marcus is still alive at the end of the story. Had hoped John and his associates had arranged for a final solution of that dark problem.