All Comments on 'The Dream Job Pt. 03'

Nice series, can't wait for more action from Miss Jasmine and her two willing sluts

Great job! I imagine Mia Isabella as the trans boss lady which I'm sure further enhances this well written story. I hope you continue with this and other stories. Thank you.

Interesting series you’ve got started on. One thing to remember is when writing a series with only one page chapters you need to keep them coming which you are doing at the moment. The next chapter wants to be up as soon as, or before, the previous one drops off the front page. That’s why you have to be clear in your mind where the story is going to end up and how you’re going to get there.

The writing needs to be tightened up a little. You don’t need to use their actual names as much, sometimes “he” and “she” are sufficient. We know who they are so “her husband Paul” isn’t necessary. We know who he is and their relationship. A person always uses their hand to gesture so gestures “with her hand” is superfluous.

My comments are intended to be constructive and I hope you’ll accept them that way. None of the points I’ve mentioned spoilt my enjoyment of the story and I look forward to the next chapter.

dripping in my panties here

Thank you all for your comments and encouragement.

Emirus: I accept your constructive criticism and have been trying to refine my writing style much along the same lines you have suggested. Hopefully, I will continue to improve.

I have at least three more chapters in the works, maybe more. I'm having a great time writing this story and I'm very glad that people are enjoying it.

Please stay tuned for more.

Nice series. The boss lady is dominating, and yes the interview was problematic as you stated, however she is kind and gentle. I like how his wife was included and that she didnt freak out. I also like how even though submissive. Paul was not emasculated, demeaned ( too much) or feminized. Nice story. Thanks for writing it.