All Comments on 'The 'Evil' Sorceress Let Me Live'

My 2 cents

A good start. I would like to read more. Thanks for your time and imagination.

can't wait for the next chapter...... surly there will be many more chapters.

This is a very good start

I appreciate the effort. Good start and good story telling. Could use an editor to clean it up a bit and fix the grammatical mistakes but as the author, of course that's up to you. The story could also benefit being told in the past tense. Instead of say, Oliver sees something, he would have saw something. "The sorceress removes her foot from Oliver's skull" should be removed her foot...

One last little thing.:

The past is something that had already happened, while time passes or has passed. As in the last line should have read "after the initial shock passed."

Thank you for the story