All Comments on 'The Holiday Session'

You would probably benefit from an editor although to be fair the spelling and grammar didn’t slip too much until the 2nd page. Even if she’s that heavily into pain and wants to be taught a lesson, a lesion is a bad idea.

The dialogue seemed a bit forced/ stilted but overall the story itself was erotic despite the safety issues involved - longer than 15-20min with nipple clamps and you risk nerve damage, leaving a bound sub alone is dumb and dangerous. It probably doesn’t sound like it but I did enjoy your story, thanks for sharing.

Tess (UK)

Thank you for your thoughtful and helpful comment. Very much appreciated.

Oh fuck this is gonna be good

it is most exciting for a woman to be on her knees. She is not allowed to touch his sensual appendage with her hands. The crop is just enough discipline and punishment to ensure that she submits to his desires and orders. The woman obviously enjoys taking him to the depth of her throat for his pleasure and hers. He has a way about him that will increase this woman's appetite for his hidden violence and brutality. She may be the sexual beast that he is looking for. It won't take him long to find out, but she will submit to his ideas and passion..

excellent writing, I felt as though I was part of the story. As a submissive I understand orders from a master. It is my function in duty to use my body as he sees fit. Interesting statement...... the woman's appetite for his hidden violence........ she is a sexual beast.

I thoroughly enjoy reading this. Made me fantasize about being in her position as the slave/sub. I'd love to see more stories of this nature from you.