All Comments on 'The Hotel'

Good pemise.

But rushed. Needed dialog during the sex. She should have been telling him what she was going to do next. And then. And then.

And why didn't she sit on his face a while while she played with/teased his cock and balls?

And maybe have him lick her asshole while she sucked his cock a bit?

Maybe even tie him down, or at least his hands, while she had her way with him?

And the ending? Wow, a ruiner.

Three stars.

This was another story that was too short, your 750 words needs to be stretched out to over 1000 words and sprinkled with much more detail, also you need to run this through a text editor, missing a lot of commas.

Her body was like an earth goddess…descriptions are detailed & visually potent ! Loved the part of arousing herself first! Looking forward to the next one🖖

The story is racy, the woman is human, relatable, and the writing is intimate. I enjoyed the story. The ending was a twist.

Overall it's a great setting. The enticing moments and the pauses. I think it's fine to use body part names because sometimes it becomes too much to not use it. The ending twist is nice. But it felt like the end was thought before the premise

Excellent. No needless dialogue. Lovely twist at end left me smiling. What’s next?

I like your brevity a lot ; its like a beetles early song ,2 chords rather than their later detailed work which is potentially pretentious. keep 'em coming !!