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Anonymousover 1 year agoSwitching the POV randomly is very confusing. Figure out which character to follow and stick with them.
Anonymousover 1 year agomultiple personality disorder doesn't lead to good writing, it seems. 3rd person is your friend.
Anonymousover 1 year agoyou must have flunked jr high writing.
You write this as if two different people are the author. Just dumb
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