All Comments on 'The Janitor's Girl Pt. 04'

What started off as something that felt like it was going to be a very, intense, detail driven, slow burn into a fantastic climax, both literally and figuratively, has devolved over the last 2 stories into hastily produced drivel. You did such a wonderful job in Pt. 01 with a long, deliberate setup. Parts of the scenario had me flashing back to the "Kristen Gets Blacked" series, which gave me incredible excitement in anticipation for the next chapters. The Pt's 03 and 04 have left me wanting and, having read your other works, seem very out of character for you. I feel like you're better than this. Far better. This story has so much potential, but the last 2 chapters have all but ruined it for me. I'm sincerely hopeful you're able to salvage a blisteringly hot chronicle of a beautiful, blonde, white girl, fighting her primal instincts as she she slowly devolves into a vessel who merely exists to serve at the pleasure of an ugly, fat, old janitor, old enough to be her Grandfather. I hope we all get to revel in her journey to worship at the alter of old, uncut, black cock!

Please continue the story!!!

The last 2 chapter I think will make sense in the big picture of the story. The author is showing character development as in how Heather learned self defense and her relationship with Darnell became a solid one. Maybe Chapter 4 and 3 should have been one, but the author is showing how Heather and Darnell got closer, and I think it's better to do this way than to write in 2 sentences, in my opinion.

I am enjoying this series very much.

Truly looking forward to continuef reading of this story.

Will the Janitor sweep up both daughter and mother?

I totally agree with Striker426's comments. This story is turning into a mundane copy of a cheap romance novel.

Please get back on track and send this story in a more erotically appropriate direction...

Mr.B

Yeah, I agree, it is sappy romantic drivel... and I wrote it. It's pure silly fantasy but as you read, you'll find some nuggets of goodness in there. I wrote it for myself and decided to share it.