All Comments on 'The Journey'

Is there more coming?

This by itself isn't a story...

...at least, not yet.

Pathetic little cuck boy writer. I hope you get everything you deserve. Hopefully your girlfriend or wife or cum dump gets pregnant and you bring up the bastard.

Go find Warren and leave this sissy wimp cuck behind. So pathetic and a joke of a man.

Not a big deal or surprising reveal. I and my friends often chat with strangers who are very eager to send dick pics, and we respond with faceless, intimate shots. We talk dirty, share our wants and needs in bed, and vent about the erotic disappoints in our marriages. We never meet to fuck our chat buddies, but the thrill and masturbation are a plus. We girls are gonna be girls.

"Chapter 1"

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No chapter # in the title to warn this wasn't a complete story BEFORE opening it always earns an automatic rating of 1. Well. that and the overly cliched title.

Old folks become geezer cuck, and whorewife granny in this POS.

SUPER HOT story!!!!! Really exciting! Amazing dialogues!

5 stars from here!

I would love it would continue more ;)

Hi EastCoaster1. This is only the beginning. Part 2 .....5 to follow!. Thanks for your feedback!

These kind of unbelievable fetish cuck fantasies are doomed, in this category, to a very low readers rating. It's a waste. Besides there are already thousands of this kind, already here and almost all ended highly disliked.

There is an interesting premise here that hopefully markgee75 will explore. Obviously, some of the other commenters think this is just a set up for the generic low grade cuck story. (I mean a story where there is little exploration of the characters and motivations, but is just a narrative of fictional events that lead to the female having sex.) To ratchet that up from sex story to "erotic literature" requires the reader to understand (if not embrace) the motivations of the characters. Indeed, we are at the juncture where the reader's understanding of the protagonist's inner make up is teetering him between being an insecure, shallow and uninteresting wimp or maybe an inexperienced young man struggling to embrace a larger concept of sexuality where growth is not being limited by the toxins of jealousy.

The story needs some work to keep the reader connected. It is a jerky ride, most notably with the transition, "Forward a few years". The pasionless style where that narrator says "He tried hard to hide his shock and surprise." could have engaged the reader more with someting like "the titillating banter

with Tina came to an abrupt halt when he was gut punched

by his old insecurities." In the latter, we are involved in the emotional journey. I think that emotions are erotic and sexual gymnastics are porn.

--- Hoping to see the erotic Journey continue.