All Comments on 'The Maid's Daughter'

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Interesting first chapter, but it’s a little short, and seems rushed. Needs to take a little more time on developing the scenes so your readers can picture what is happening. Everything seems to be presented —— then quickly thrown away as you leap to the next idea. Even the important step of them starting to fuck is just a quick line; strongly suggest you develop both characters and scenes. Good start - keep writing.

Incomplete.. thoh not badly written

It had.e aroused and wantingore