All Comments on 'The Mermaid'

Potential for a much more detailed expanded tale. Interesting but way too brief--lots more background needed. Kudos for a good start, now please expand it and continue. Thanks.

I love mermaid stories. I even tried to write one myself. Chapter 2, please. I want to see what happens next between Adam and Lilith. A baby perhaps?

A good start but a few plot holes that are distracting to the story. A lighthouse keeper who does not turn the automatic light on at night would not have a job the next morning with ship wreckage all over the coast. And more distractingly Lillith seems to have both legs and a tail at the same time.

In response to the plot holes. Not turning on the automated system was deliberate and with a treasure map to be found on Tenerife would Lillith care if she lost her job? Having repaired the Toby it was seaworthy and ready to sail to Tenerife. As for having a tail and feet at the same time it was made clear her feet had turned to a tail when she was sitting on the rocks.