All Comments on 'The Neighbors'

Should be in the interracial category, given how the author fetishizes people of colour.

Good start. Be careful not to mix up the Mike/Mark names.

BDSM??

Very nice story. I thought it was for the most part realistic and erotic. Some of the language was quite formal? Not sure if that’s the word I’m looking for, but phrases like “pleasure missile”, “passage of desire” a bit suburban froufrou.

As has been mentioned you did mix up the characters of Mike and Mark at least once.

As for Anon of “fetishises” personally I really don’t see it at all.

Look forward to reading more of your writing. Thanks for sharing

Tess (uk)