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jwswinglejwswingle4 months ago

More continuity issues with names; who the heck is John, and how was he at their Saturday night dinner on page 1? Just busting your chops, but continuity is important to keep readers engaged. I realized it was Bill asking what "John" said, but please keep writing, and maybe proof read for name continuity as you expand this story universe.

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Have enjoyed reading stories here so thought I would try to write some as well

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