All Comments on 'The New Workmates'

That was one nasty, terribly written, piece of shit. Are there no standards at all for LW?

One word, Wow !

i hope you can come up with better stories than you being a limp dicked punk

He should have gone and gotten his tire iron and bashed the vans windows then bashed Juan. Then left his soon to be ex wife with Juan.

Absolute crap, spare us from anymore....retire !!

guuysb lucky to be rid of her and them.

Really? You are free to live your life and go any place you want! You got rid of a cheap whore! What more do you want?

Lool tf was this ?

Wow, that's a lot of stupid for that short of a story.

Getting better shouldn't be difficult at all. You could start by proofreading yourself after finishing. I'm sure that you would identify plenty of mistakes. If you don't find any, maybe writing stories ist just not for you.

Absolute rubbish.

I think you are lucky too! Thank God and Greyhound , She's gone!!

The last sentence makes it worthwhile:

"single and unemployed storie writer hopefully I get better"

Hope in one hand, shit in the other and see which fills up faster. Get used to ramen noodles, because there isn't any steak in your future. This was so bad, that it read like a bad writer's attempt of a parody of a bad cuckold story.

Jesus, not another one with DD's!!

Have they all got them? Or is a sexual experience

You have to be able to make your stories more believable. That was shite

"drive away"?;oh, wait, you're raping my wife. Unfortunately I had to break out the windshield and shoot your ass. Repeatedly.

Things got a little crazy when Thomas and Juan started dirty dancing with her. Of course in any story you put yourself in the main characters shoes as what you would do. First of all I kind of found it hard to believe that the main character allowed all this to happen. He needed a John Wayne Moment where he would go in there bust those two guys away from her and carrier out to the car over his shoulder if he had to. Kind of like where he carried Marine O'Hara over his shoulder in some of his movies But to stand there and watch them rape her in that van as I was reading I was hoping he would smash out the window or flatten their tires or do something to get her out of there. He was going to lose his job anyway so he might as well have done it fighting for his wife.