All Comments on 'The Prize Ch. 01'

Very erotic too but please get a proof reader or editor there were some minor mistakes but it kind of pulled me out/of the story to discover that her potential benefactor had a .....

“ two-day scruff of a bread.”

Of course it’s obvious that you meant beard but the image of sliced bread on his face made me chuckle.

The only other thing that was *off* was using the word “cum” instead of orgasm or climax, it’s just seems juvenile.

Thanks for sharing

Tess (uk)