All Comments on 'The Proposal'

***Thanks for the short story a little light in the storyline, but still somewhat entertaining.

Sad ending!

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An intriguing trio of story-fragments from you today. This one I'd like to see developed further. I look forward to more chapters.

Just an overwrought attempt at depth of emotion where none exists.

Like expecting a steak dinner, and getting ramen noodles instead.

Really cool! A ships passing in the night story with some "he who hesitates is lost" thrown into the mix. Platitudes to be sure but also with large kernels of experiential wisdom. Nicely set up, and the usual extended psychobabble was omitted in favour of a succinct telling of the tale. It is refreshing when an author trusts their readers enough to let them fill in for themselves the outlines of a character's thoughts. Very enjoyable! 5 stars.

I had to check again to see how this happened. There was no meeting time on the note! Just meet me.

Anyway i feel he is better off. She said no and without a “why” and shacks up who know where for two weeks.

One and done. Move on or stay fwb but see others and for goodness sake use protection.

Play stupid games, win stupid prizes. Her prize was the empty stage behind door number three. Wah! Wah! Hopefully Aaron finds a better woman who won't play games with his heart.

I very much liked this piece; surprised at some comments. Poignant and painful yet happens so often; I suspect most of us have been there one way or another — over taken by paralysis only to suffer the consequences of indecision. Sometimes consequences are minor, sometimes not.

@Migbird Thank you 😊 We will see what the editor says once I finish a draft. Maybe this one doesn't belong in the book?