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Click hereMaybe I'll be full of more than that," she answered seductively.
"Oh, shit," was his only reply.
Many thanks to chasten and all the Adirondack Adventurers for their beta reads, editing and suggestions. Also to MsCherylTerra for her continued encouragement and help.
Since you have been commenting on my stuff I figured I should come over here and read one of yours. I liked the build-up almost more than the relationship with the doctor. It would have been fun to read about her coming to really enjoy her topless work at the restaurant. Other than a few grammatical errors here and there, and the changing of Zach to Barry, like a previous commentor mentioned, I thought it was well-written and nicely paced. It could have even been longer for my taste.
Top quality writing from PickFiction, as always. A perfect story for the season.
I loved the story. Two strong likeable characters. I’d love to read about their future adventures
I enjoyed the pre-sex story. Very good character development even of minor characters (Barry and Eileen). The pacing was good. You did change Zach to Barry once which I consider a rookie mistake. There was one other error in that Erica’s car would not stall from a loose battery cable unless she was driving a race car. Personal vehicles use the battery only to start.
Other than those minor technical errors it was a good read and I look forward to reading more of your writings.
- - Milo Talon (look me up. I am a member)
Very nice love story. No cheating, no revenge, not even much graphic fun, but a good read. Great even.