All Comments on 'The Screwing of The Tame'

A hot story. Thanks for your time and imagination.

Whilst entertaining and delightfully descriptive, I was confused in a few places, and I'll get to that in a moment.

Firstly though, I was expecting a few more Shakespeare references for some reason. Perhaps they were there and I'm not knowledgeable enough to have spotted them

At the beginning I didn't really know the gender of the narrator. Another break in the flow of the story was the first line of dialogue. "How did you meet her?" I wasn't sure which character said this. I also had to recheck who Annette was because it had been a long time since she'd been first mentioned.

The story flow improved from then on until I got to the end. I had to read the paragraph about the swinger's cruise a couple times just so it made sense and again with the mention of 'Denmark' I wondered if this was some allusion to Hamlet, but I wasn't sure.

Hope to read more of your stories