by Brownrice_sugar
So glad you added another chapter. I loved the first two chapters and had read them more than once. Hope you continue with this.
I really like where this is going. Just don't take so long for the next update. Great job.
I would enjoy the story so much more if I didn't have to keep stopping and saying "huh", when I come across a grammar and spelling error that should not be or if the phrase doesn't make sense. The storyline interests me but it desperately needs editing for every chapter that has been posted so far.
love reading about these two, their is more to the story then just straight wam bam thank you ma'am sex like another reader said, it has depth and is actually great reading. I rather read this story then some of the other fluff on here
I likes it but you kept changing the name from Jack to Jake so which one is it?
really? if this story wasn't so hot, i would have stopped reading but other than that, good stuff
need an editor to push the string of correct verbs, adverbs etc together-still good though :>)