All Comments on 'This Feeling Inside Me Ch. 01'

Not bad. I like the idea and the erotic parts are hot. The dialogue is a bit off and you switch from past to present tense often. I recommend sticking with one, but you show a lot of promise and I look forward to your future stories :)

This story needs a lot of work. The explanation of atmospheric entry is completely wrong. Also, this story is infested with punctuation and grammar mistakes. Additionally, your pacing is haphazard. This story reads like it was written by a concussed baboon.

Love the tentacle sex/impreg angle...looking forward to more!