All Comments on 'Time Flies Ch. 02'

Well written! It moves along smoothly, your plotting techniques are impeccable!

Easy 5*s.

Not sure what “point” is being made by smashing someone’s cellphone and making a spurious arrest, all the while threatening her children with rape. Troy later admits “we’ll have to let her go of course”. Pretty unprofessional.

The next chapter has been submitted and hopefully will be published soon.

Anon/what was the point - instead of blowing it off as 'unprofessional', maybe you should consider exactly WHY the IC did what he did. Perhaps it's a cluuuuuue to what is going on? Or is it 'unprofessional' of me to insert clues into my mystery stories? ;-)

This second chapter has a serious amount of clues especially regarding the IC, Perhaps the solution involves more than a casual relationship with one DEA agent named MERKLE who certainly sounds like someone other than he has been shown. As to the IC and his preparations for a disappearing act, there are a lot of new stories to be written on that subject. Perhaps everyone has forgotten about the connection to the Company.

Seems the IC has gone completely off the track, so what has he got up his sleeve besides his arm???

Soon as I saw DEA Agent Fred Merkle’s name I had to ask: Is his nickname “Bonehead?” Maybe he’s the Grandson of the old NY Giant’s First Baseman?...😉

Also: great story so far!

rick

even bad guys controllers know one can be caught thru bad paper work. TK U MLJ LV NV

Now what wascDon's closing remark about?

*****Thanks for the read.