All Comments on 'Too Good to Be True Pt. 03'

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Bedroomeyes81Bedroomeyes81about 4 years ago

very nice keep up the great work

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
Nice

Very nice, plus we finally found out where April learned to eat pussy. I sure hope there's more.

Jedd

Fuzzy_KbearFuzzy_Kbearover 3 years ago

When you have three women in one spot DON'T use She ALL the time it makes it confusing as to whom is saying what. especially if you accidently use the wrong name beforehand. Your last bit of conversation is a perfect example you accidentally used Lisa's name instead of Tammy's the said She said mom got her on BC at 16. If Lisa was on BC by her mom at 16 it would screw the whole story up. Took a minute to realize you just used the wrong name before the 'She said'

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