All Comments on 'Tranquil Minds Pt. 00 - Prologue'

The first is a criticism, just to get it out of the way. Get an editor, please. I enjoyed the story, but the constant grammar mistakes were distracting. Second point is, I loved this story, it was amazingly hot in concept, and I think it has wonderful potential with future concepts. The third point is that I REALLY hope Ally saying "Ally is here to serve you" means that Carmine programs her slaves to speak third person, without saying "I" or "me" because that's a personal fetish of mine that not many authors indulge.

5* for the potential, I look forward to more parts!