All Comments on 'Unusual patient care - Ch. 01'

Very clinical and non-sexual, I guess that was the point of your story. You could have increased the amount of Mia's handling of his penis and balls, taking it further away from the surgical POV and put a little sexual groping into the story. Try and keep in mind your reading audience and what they expect from the story.

Appreciate the feedback, 'Anonymous'! Perhaps I could have been clearer about Chapter 1's deliberate pacing, with the promise of a more exciting journey in Chapter 2. Alternatively, combining both chapters might have offered a more cohesive story experience.