All Comments on 'Vampire On Cardiff Road'

... with both PennLady and Criss's coments and I think if you do a part 2 you should rewrigt this part so it isn't so rough. It just needs some work to be rather good.

please consider writing another chapter,im interested in seeing what,if anything,Catherine and Dee do with Geneva

Reasonable premise here that could be fun, but this moved way too fast. I didn't care for the present tense, either. What happened to the girl, anyway? The sequence of them looking through the window was a bit confusing as well.