All Comments on 'Wanting Ch. 02: Desire Explored'

enjoyed it. but did we miss something betrween the school and the coffee shop?

Severely lacking continuity from the previous 'to be continued' one moment he's with Dr Cassandra and Claudia in a cliff hanger the next he's suddenly at a coffee shop, no explination.. if the author wanted to do stand alone tales.. why not just, do stand alone stories.

Complete disconnect between this and the first chapter. After going into so much detail introducing Casandra, their interaction was completely dropped. No explanation was given about the experiment when he was in the perfect place/and with the ideal person to provide clarity. Also, he suddenly had (a modicum of) control over the power where every stray thought caused a reaction in the last chapter.

It's almost like an entire chapter was left out (wink wink, nudge nudge)

Regardless, interesting concept and well written aside from the broader inconsistencies.

Next time you make comparison between a big busom girl and a small one like you did ("she was nothing compared to the other") just make sure the story doesn't fall into the small tits category so people who are interested in smaller girls don't have to read the nth story about glorification of big boobs.

Awesome! Keep up the good work! 😊