All Comments on 'What a Wild Day'

Difficult switching from 1st to 3rd person during story

No further comment needed.

Made my dick hard

Very nice, thanks!

No mistreatment, no abuse, no cliche "pre-cum". Nice plot. Thanks for writing something enjoyable.

Proof Reading Required.

Great story. So realistic that one would believe it actually happened AND mentally replace you with them self.

Nicely done.

I bet she tasted real good !

Hot but needs more description of her pussy.

Hot! At least he pumped his sperm inside her pussy, right where it belongs yummm.

I liked your story. It would have been easier to read if it didn't change between 1st and 3rd person so much - the last sentence is a good example. I read it and then tried to fix it in my mind. No big deal, but keep this in mind for future stories. Thanks.

Doesn’t make sense right from the beginning. You say she is pointing to him when it is him talking so wouldn’t you say pointing to me?