All Comments on 'When You Least Expect It'

Good beginning!

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?????????????????? Was there supposed to be a story here? Don't be like so many newbies and write a multi part story one page at a time. I gave it a 2 for trying. It could have easily been a 4 had you taken the time to complete the story, or at least a part one. Another bit of advice, if the story is going to have several chapters or parts, number them. I clicked expecting to find a story, not a brief snapshot. Other than the black/white portion the story doesn't match the tags.

Nice intro

I am looking forward to the next installment.

An excellent start. A bit short, but ending in a good place knowing more to come.

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Thanks for all the feedback both positive and negative. This is my first attempt at writing anything. All the input will, I hope, help me not only flesh out my story, but prompt me to grow as an aspiring writer.

why can't anyone on this site these days write a complete story? Don't leave us hanging if you have a story finish it then we can put a value on it

This author brought hardly anything to the story...and now wants ideas for finishing it.

What kind of stories????? Is that called story…????? What’s the definition of “ story” ??? Don’t call this is story….